darkpoet26: this poem is good. it describes how you feel well but you could descibe how you feel alot more. it's deep and it leaves you speechless. it expresses how you feel at times and no one else. it's dramatic but i wouldn't call it scary. great job
on February 04, 2009 2:02 PM |
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angelnikki88: this poem was very well written! :)
on January 31, 2009 11:43 AM |
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deals187: wow bloody love this one. the best i've read on this site for a good while.
on January 31, 2009 10:47 AM |
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Hidden_in_the_Shadows: over rated simply overrated makes me sick
on January 29, 2009 3:45 PM |
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TheatreLit: You wrote your thoughts uniquly.
nice! :)
on October 14, 2008 8:08 PM |
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DiNiO: I agree that it was creative and somewhat captivating. However, Poetry isn't all about big words, It needs to be tightened, going through it another time it gets a little redundant :) good job
on December 17, 2007 4:06 PM |
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deals187: intence. loved it.
on December 16, 2007 7:42 PM |
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Nativehoney54: it's scary but i like it
on March 01, 2007 9:08 PM |
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TheFoxtrot: this is quite good and the language just makes it even better
on February 03, 2007 9:29 AM |
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missAmelia: ..wow..Pretty intricate..I like this peom cause it really encourages the reader to imagine what is happeing and lets them figure out how the peom fits into their life and situations...Great job keep writing.
on January 31, 2007 10:46 PM |
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just_barely_me: you use interesting words that keep me reading. very good job. i love your poems
on January 31, 2007 7:30 PM |
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froggystyle1589: holy **** that was good
on January 26, 2007 10:51 AM |
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neoprose: Your articulation is a refreshing way to mesmerise the readers; almost into a state of confusion, yet I can understand and appreciate it, which is all I care about. I think for this particular poem a stanza breaks in between "And up above..." and the upper line; and between
my soul, my being..." and the previous line. I understand the way it was written was to flow with the confusion and realisation of the persona's experience of emotion, but stanza breaks that do not conclude themselves can also give that bounce of impact that gets the readers with a lower level of syntax back into it easier.
on January 25, 2007 6:09 AM |
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erin_j_thomas: Wow, this poem kinda makes me want to quit writing, because I'm ashamed of my own work.
on January 10, 2007 8:38 AM |
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MandiK_OE: Wow...this is really good! YOU are amazing. Wow, Wow, Wow! I wish I could write like that! I'm totally jealous!
on January 09, 2007 5:14 PM |
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Fonzy_the_fonz:
This is all true, I feel all in which you are saying. Your words are very interesting you use a form I'm not use to seeing within a person writting, and I like it alot, its something new, and it seems very emotional. I like this poem alot.
on December 14, 2006 7:34 PM |
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